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　　雅思写作范文（张依甜）：

　　Some people think instead of preventing climate change, we should fine ways to live with it. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

　　When it comes to the issue of the response to climate change, voices for combating it seems to be big and some people even suggest that we should try to reverse the trend, but I side with the opinion that human beings had better learn to adjust to the constantly changing environment.

　　Undeniably, climate deterioration more or less exerts negative impacts on our daily life and on future generations. It is widely recognized that the temperature of the earth is rising gradually due to greenhouse effect resulting from gas emitted by cars . The extreme heat in some regions contributes to some natural disasters, such as worldwide famine and severe flood. Additionally, the icebergs, which are the main source of fresh water, have been melting at an accelerating rate. In consequence, coastline lowland cities are confronted with the dangers of being inundated in one day. These problems can justify our decision to stop the climate from further deteriorating.

　　红色注：温室效应不仅仅是由于汽车尾气的排放，可以宽泛一点by burning fossil fuels。

　　However, some traditional industries do not take the consequences of the worsening climate on fish and sea into consideration when discharging industrial wastes into rivers directly. It is impossible for the government to ban those obsolete industries entirely because the high unemployment rate may jeopardize the stability of our society. In the mean time, the tendency of global warming does get slower if we reduce our use of private cars, but the temperature on average will still be rising gradually. The effort of individuals by taking public transport will be overwhelmed and offset by the release of industrial waste gas immediately. Thus, developing new technology that suits for a new environment may be a practical and reliable method.

　　红色注：缺本段主题句I would argue that accepting the change and living with it seems to be morerealistic.

　　As a result, finding a way to live with it appears to be more realistic compared with reversing the climate tendency. The solutions to curb or decelerate climate change, though is mostly initiated at the government level, still require collective effort made by individuals and must be also carried out at the individual level.

　　红色注：应为are

　　优点：本文结构清晰，先让步后摆出自己观点；观点论证和拓展很充分；句式和词汇多样化，运用了主语从句，定语从句等高分句式。