来源:环球教育
小编:长安 150寒风起,雾霾散,大快人心。没想到,在雅思的考场里也传来了一个好消息:写作考题又是一个典型的老题重现。
此题典型到什么程度呢?在环球教育杨亮老师的面授班,这个题基本都讲过。个别班,这道题还是作业。由于雾霾的消散,笔者心情大好。故而和大家分享两篇文章,相互学习,共同提高。话不多说,直奔主题。
原题如下:
Some think the best city is "vertical" city where people live and work in tall buildings. Others think "horizontal" city is better where there are few tall buildings. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. 20170216 / 20141206
既然是典型的题,那么就先来一个典型的写法。一个四段法来拆解此题。
Development of cities that are thought as human’s habitats has been drawing enough attention from the public and has become a topic with various views. It is an endless discussion that either vertical cities or horizontal ones will be the dominant types of cities in the future.
开头段,还是常年不变的写法,既是背景的复写和题目的点明。
Great convenience has been provided to people who live in vertical cities. The principal reason is that tall buildings allow people to enjoy more resources in a smaller area. One obvious example is that the staff working in a tall office building cannot only work there but also have meals and even go shopping in the same building. On top of this, many countries in the world have the trend of developing centrally. For instance, no matter people live in a developed or developing country, the most advanced medical care with top experts is often located in the capital city. Accordingly, the concept of vertical buildings is also in harmony with the centralized distribution of modern social resources.
主段一,笔者重点讨论垂直型城市。通过该类型城市两个优点的论述来表达笔者对此的倾向。
On the other hand, a horizontal city which is more natural is less crowded. That means residents in a horizontal city can have more private space. A leading example is that a private swimming pool often accompanies a super-large house in a horizontal community. On the contrary, more places are and would be needed with the growing number of population. For instance, dwellings, schools, hospitals and working places would all increase. As a consequence, the rapid development of global population might lead to certain conflicts with the existence of horizontal cities that occupy more space than vertical cities do.
主段二,笔者着重讨论水平型城市。先是言明其优点,随后在究其缺点展开。进而通过本段的论证来表达出笔者就此类型城市的立场。
According to what has been discussed above, more comfort as horizontal cities offer, vertical cities are more likely to be the solution to tackle the increase of worldwide population.
通过前面有明显倾向性的论证,结论段笔者可以自然而然地阐述自身的立场,既倾向前者而不看好后者。
下文的写法尽管同样为四段法,却明显与上文不同。从论证逻辑上明显区分上文。
Development of cities that are thought as human’s habitats has been drawing enough attention from the public and has become issue with conflicting views. It is an endless discussion that either vertical cities or horizontal ones will be the dominant types of cities in the future. In fact, the type of city that is able to provide convenience and can be in harmony with centralized distribution of social resources is deemed to be the future mainstream of development of cities.
开头段,通常为两句,背景和点题。然而此段落在点题之后,另起一句直接表达了本文的论证逻辑。“究竟什么样的城市类型才是未来城市发展的主流呢?这取决于该种城市是否可以给居民提供舒适性以及是否顺应社会资源集中化分布的大趋势。”全文当中,这句话最为关键。
Vertical cities, undeniably, offer more convenience with most of people’s daily activities taking place nearly in the same building. It is a case in point that every morning people might only take 5 minutes lift to go to work instead of taking subway for 1 hour to get to their offices in horizontal cities. Being time-saving makes vertical cities more suitable for people in future society than horizontal cities where people are still struggling with designing some more efficient transport systems.
从开头段中介绍本文论证逻辑的句子可知,主段一就是在提供给居民舒适性的方面对比这两种城市。
Many countries in the world have the trend of developing centrally, especially the distribution of social resources such as educational institutes and hospitals, which obviously has an immediate relationship with population distribution. With an increasing number of people moving to cities aiming at sharing more advanced social resources, vertical cities seem to be the only solution providing feasibility for this unbalanced distribution of population. On the other hand, crying out hopelessly about some unreachable vital resources is what people in horizontal cities can only do.
与主段一相似,本段就是论证究其根本那种城市顺应社会资源集中化分布的趋势。两个主段的论证都是紧扣开头段第三句话的逻辑。
Because of what has been discussed above, this essay can simply conclude that according to convenience and the unbalanced distribution of social resources vertical cities are more likely to be the final answer of cities’ development.
通过主段的论证,垂直型的城市已经获得两分,因此本文最后的结论非常清晰。
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